A War-Filled Vacation

About three months ago, I had a vacation in Ohio because my grandparents live there. Their farm is 500 acres, so it's a great place to have an Airsoft war. I brought my Airsoft guns just in case. My uncle, who used to be in the Navy, was there, and we asked him to play. We had to wait for him to finish some work, but we were willing to wait. In the end, the war took place in a big white barn. It was just like a real war.

My older brother (Top Dude) was on my team and my little brother (SuperBro) was on my uncle's team. Top Dude and I were both armed with M3000 pistol grip shotguns and .357 Magnum revolvers. Super Bro had the same revolver and a Spas12 pistol grip shotgun. We only gave my uncle one gun, one of the M3000 shotguns, because he was by far the best shot. We all loaded up with plenty of ammunition, and we were ready to start the war!

My brother and I started off inside the barn, which we were pretending was a sports arena. We were trying to stop my uncle and Super Bro from planting a bomb inside. They were pretending to be terrorists, and we were counter-terrorists. Eventually they rushed in and trapped us near a small door. We were forced to escape through it.

Later on, when they left to reload, I snuck in and hid in the loft. So when Super Bro and my uncle came back, I took them by surprise! Top Dude chased Super Bro to the other side of the barn, while I drew fire from my uncle. As soon as he ran out of ammo and Top Dude was victorious over Super Bro, I considered them the losers.

So that's how my older brother and I won the war. It was a great vacation!

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My mom is making me show you my rough draft too. My assignment was to go back and add details! Here was my rough draft:

About three months ago, I had a vacation in Ohio because my grandparents live there. I brought my Airsoft guns just in case we wanted to have a war. In the end we did, in a big red barn. It was just like a real war.

My older brother was on my team and my little brother was on my uncle's team. My brothers and I all have Airsoft revolvers and a rifle to arm us. We were ready to start the war!

My brother and I started off in the barn. Eventually my little brother's team drove us out of the barn, but later on we came through the back of the barn and stole it back.

When my older brother went to go reload, I stayed and hid in the loft. So that when my little brothers team came back, I took them by surprise! My older brother and I won. It was a great vacation.